Saddle Up Saloon; Colleen’s Double Ennead Challenge No. 5

This month, the double ennead takes through the TUFF challenge like the Carrot Ranch Rodeo with the double ennead being taken from 99 syllables to 48 syllables, to 24 syllables to finally, a haiku.
The Double Ennead comprises five lines with a syllable count of 6/5/11/6/5, (33 SYLLABLES per stanza) 3 STANZAS EACH

SHAFT OF HOPE
a warm hued shaft dazzles
on azure expanse
luminescent sheen in an idyllic trance
blazing through dark waters
in a rippled mirth

haloed trail to heaven
in a dark chiasm
leading to faraway stars mysterious
dispelling deep darkness
shading life profound

fading embers burnish
bright to light dark lives
life’s shadowy shroud basks in fiery lustre
incandescent hope flows
into dark niches
For the 48 syllable poem a 4-8-4 stanza trio:
warm hued shaft falls
on dark waters in shiny trance
a rippled blaze
haloed trail leads
way to stars far mysterious
on a dark night
fading embers
of life’s shady shroud burnish bright
hope flows unbound

For the 24 (6-6-6-6) syllables and only one stanza:

bright trance on dark waters
haloed trail to stars far
life’s fading embers glow
luminous hope abounds
Finally, 12 syllable haiku (short-long-short):

bright beam glows on
life’s dark fading embers
hope shines

Via: Saddle up Saloon: Colleen’s Double Ennead Challenge

9 thoughts on “Saddle Up Saloon; Colleen’s Double Ennead Challenge No. 5”

  1. I am so sorry! I never got back here to comment on your poem. I must have lost track of the notification. I’m thrilled with the changes your poem took to get to the haiku. That haiku is spectacular. What did you think of the process? It sure helps to pare down the words and get to our meaning, doesn’t it? ❤

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    1. Paring down is a journey in itself.
      You realise what is important and what needs to be shredded.
      In short,fluff goes and the soul of verses speak aloud!
      Thanks for making us part of this introspective journey!

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      1. Yes! You said it perfectly. All the flowery prose is just words. When you get down to the true meaning of your message it shines with fewer words. This is the challenge that Charli Mills taught us all at the Rodeo in the fall. It’s an excellent way to pare down all the filler words and to hone in on your meaning. Bravo for all your hard work. ❤

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      2. No,I and still learning the art.
        It is exciting to get that perfect line and once you crack it , it is a high and a great sense of satisfaction!
        In fact,now I am planning to rework on my earlier ones!

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  2. […] SHAFT OF HOPE a warm hued shaft dazzles on azure expanse luminescent sheen in an idyllic trance blazing through dark waters in a rippled mirth haloed trail to heaven in a dark chiasm leading to faraway stars mysterious dispelling deep darkness shading life profound fading embers burnish bright to light dark lives life’s shadowy shroud basks in fiery lustre incandescent hope flows into dark niches For the 48 syllable poem a 4-8-4 stanza trio: warm hued shaft falls on dark waters in shiny trance a rippled blaze haloed trail leads way to stars far mysterious on a dark night fading embers of life’s shady shroud burnish bright hope flows unbound For the 24 (6-6-6-6) syllables and only one stanza: bright trance on dark waters haloed trail to stars far life’s fading embers glow luminous hope abounds Finally, 12 syllable haiku (short-long-short): bright beam glows on life’s dark fading embers hope shines © theIndieShe […]

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